Klarnio
Pre-call brief
capitaale.com/en
1Who they are
Invoicing, flat-rate limit and tax tracking for freelancers and small companies in Serbia and Slovenia.
The page talks to an owner who hears about the 6 million limit from their accountant three weeks too late.
2Three sentences from their homepage
- VisualiseFAIL
“Sound familiar?”
It asks the reader to recognise a problem before showing one, so there is nothing yet to picture.
- FalsifyFAIL
“Join the pausalci and companies across Serbia and Slovenia who finally know their numbers.”
It invites the reader into a crowd it never counts, so nothing in it can be checked.
- OwnableFAIL
“Simple, transparent pricing”
Any pricing page could carry this heading unchanged. The line under it, first charge on day 31, is the one only Capitaale can say.
3Open the call with
“Your hero gives three numbers anyone can check. Why does the page end on a crowd nobody can count?”
4What you would fix first
Final call to action, the last sentence before the signup button
Join the pausalci and companies across Serbia and Slovenia who finally know their numbers.
Join the (active accounts), left blank: the page does not state it pausalci and companies across Serbia and Slovenia who track their 6 million limit in Capitaale.
Why:The old line asks the reader to trust a crowd it never counts. The new one gives them a number they could check, and it ends on the 6 million limit, the strongest idea on the page. The blank is deliberate: the page does not state the count, so Klarnio does not invent one.